NaPoWriMo #26: Getting Scrappy, Random Antithetical Thoughts

April 25, 2010

I started a few lines a while back about the process by which I think of my poetry. I thought looking at how I develop the poem would make an interesting poem. I also wanted to put it in the context of a dream since I dream quite a bit and most of the times can’t make heads or tales out of the dream’s meaning or meaninglessness. This was somewhat an exploration into surrealism with my standard format of rhyme and meter. I think I finally put this one together this evening. Hope it works and you enjoy it.

Antithetical Thoughts
(In search of dialectical surrealism)

Last night there was a traffic jam
Across my corpus callosum,
The superhighway between hemispheres
Encountered a faulty fulcrum.

Synaptic transmissions were firing,
But the mobility of thoughts were crashing,
Those that came from the right side
Had detoured with ideas flashing.

I noticed the deviation early on,
But could not control the flow,
The thoughts that came from the left,
Slid down like ice and snow.

An avalanche of thoughts cascade,
From the flooding of brain storms,
Country and Rock intertwined,
As judgement had forewarned.

I was seated in a rock stadium,
As I saw my ideas clash,
A dark punk rocker in blue overalls
Sung country fast and brash.

It was in fact a strange melody
With fast tempo and country twang,
I could not fit the voice and face,
As back up singers sang.

But then the stage was lit from above
And I saw the stage band sign,
My brain had just entertained the thought
Of Marilyn Moonshine!

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Comments (16)
  1. Stan Ski Said,

    The Rock-Opera explained – I always wondered…

  2. vivienne blake Said,

    This surreal poem sums up the oddities of dreaming in a most satisfying manner. Thank you.

  3. Ingeborg Said,

    Love it :) Dream and Poets adrenaline rush fusing together nicely. Ingeborg.

  4. Robin Said,

    Wow–Quite an interesting progression of ideas and thoughts. Enjoyed it all…especially some of the music lines.

  5. Derrick Said,

    Well, I’ve learned some new big words, thanks. Rock and country – that could have been a nightmare!

  6. Marie Said,

    Terrific! Sounds great read aloud, too.

  7. admin Said,

    Thanks, Stan.

  8. admin Said,

    Thanks, Vivienne. I’m glad you enjoyed it.

    Happy Monday!

    ~Mark

  9. admin Said,

    Thanks, Robin. It’s amazing what can enter your brain at the oddest of hours. :-)

    ~Mark

  10. admin Said,

    Thanks, Derrick. There are lots of rocks in the country and rocks inside my head.

    Happy Monday!

    ~Mark

  11. admin Said,

    Thanks, Marie. I tried top give it a musical rhythm. Glad you enjoyed it!

    ~Mark

  12. admin Said,

    Thanks, Ingeborg. I just worry that I’ve opened a Pandora’s box musical genre of punk-country!

    Thanks for your kind words!

    ~Mark

  13. pamela Said,

    Mark,
    Love it! Marilyn Mooshine, huh.
    Pamela

  14. admin Said,

    Thanks, Pamela.

    Punk rocking hillbillies, next on the Jerry Springer Show! ;-)

    ~Mark

  15. one more believer Said,

    the things that go on in one’s head… i would have liked to hear those expressions as they warbled round up and down…. did you say marilyn on moonshine?? nightflight no 5

  16. Mark Lysgaard Said,

    Thank you. It’s kind of like Marilyn Manson, but Marilyn on Moonshine sounds just as fun.

    Thanks!

    I’ll check out yours…your poem that is :-)

    ~Mark

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